这句英文有没有语病有没有更好的写法Happenedbywhichthesalesofgoods,productsandsupplyingservices,thefundswhichwillbecollectedfromorderingentitiesandservice-acceptingentitieswillbebookedaccordingtotheactualam

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这句英文有没有语病 有没有更好的写法
Happened by which the sales of goods,products and supplying services,the funds which will be collected from ordering entities and service-accepting entities will be booked according to the actual amount.

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happen by?很别扭,但没找出具体错误,我用我自己的写法试着改写一下.
The sales of goods,products and supplying services will be booked according to the actual amount by the funds would have been collected from ordering and service-accepting entities.
你看看是不是感觉要好一点.