帮我改一下作文（老师说我后面的workhard用得太多了,应该如何替换?）MyFamousPersonMymotheristhegreatestandmostfamouspersoninmyheart.Sheisabeautifulstarinmysky.Mymotherisverygreat.Sheoftenhelpswithmy

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帮我改一下作文（老师说我后面的work hard用得太多了,应该如何替换?）
My Famous Person
My mother is the greatest and most famous person in my heart.She is a beautiful star in my sky.
My mother is very great.She often helps with my homework.She patiently explained to my question.Every time she told me,she was always smiling.And buy many books for me.She is very helpful.She is good at housework,too.She also works hard because she wants to make a lot of money for me.My mother is very strong.She never gives up.She works so hard,that she is very successful.
I will work as hard as in my study like my mother in the future

Answer 1

1. She patiently explained to my question. 最好改成一般现在时,也就是explains,同时用questions
2.Every time she told me, she was always smiling. And buy many books for me.最好是改成tells,is always ...,后面改成And she is always buying books for me.不然这句话就少主语了
3. She works so hard改成She is so hard-working that.
4.I will work as hard as in my study like my mother in the future改成I will do my best in my study in the future 不用 like my mother 吧?毕竟我妈妈不用学习了啊,对吧,嘿嘿