请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用!谢谢DearJenny,Iamwritingthislettertoexpressmysincerethankstoyou.Youareaverykindpersoninmyheart,tobehonest,WhenIarrivedinthiscity,Ifeltquietlonelyandafraid.myen

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请求帮忙批改一篇小作文,英语,急用! 谢谢
Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest ,When I arrived in this city ,I felt quiet lonely and afraid. my english wasn’t so good that i couldn’t take bus by myself. I have a lot preparation to do especially before the new term stars .Fortunately I met you . I still remember that you took me to go to the local library and buy some equipments from market. When I have difficulties with my English language or have s homesick ,you always stay with me and help me overcome difficulties.
I feel it so lucky to have met you and been a good friend with you .I’d like to invite you come to my house to join a meal with me .and.I hope you will give me the chance to return your kindness.
Yours sincerely
Hayley

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Dear Jenny ,
I am writing this letter to express my sincere thanks to you.
You are a very kind person in my heart , to be honest , when I arrived in this city, I felt quite lonely and afraid. My english wasn’t so good so that I couldn’t take the bus by myself. I had a lot of preparation to do especially before the new term started .Fortunately I met you . I still remember that you took me to go to the local library and bought some equipments from the market. When I have difficulties with my English language or have s homesick, you always stay with me and help me overcome the difficulties.
I feel so lucky to meet you and been a good friend with you. I’d like to invite you come to my house to join a meal with me. And I hope you will give me a chance to return your kindness.
Your sincerely
Hayley
你犯了很多语法错误啊.第三行when不应该大写,quiet是安静,quite是“很”,第四行I没大写,so that句型不能用.take bus中间加the,have要用过去时,第五行stars应该是started,第六行buy要用过去时,from market中间要加the,第七行overcome difficulties中间加the.第八行feel直接加so lucky,同时have met要用meet.join a meal 要改成have a meal.and大写,并且多了一个句号.结尾应该是your sincerely.最大的问题是你标点前面（句子最后一个单词和标点之间）不能空格,标点后面（句子开始的地方）要空格.这些错误在上面已经被我全部修正了.祝你作文写的越来越好.