求高手对这篇六级作文进行修改,给出一些修改意见也可以,比如替换一些高分词汇啊,修改一下句型结构啊Inrecentyears,anincreasingnumberofpeoplearebeginningtonoticethatwhethertheThreeGeorgesDamisgoo

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求高手对这篇六级作文进行修改,给出一些修改意见也可以,比如替换一些高分词汇啊,修改一下句型结构啊
In recent years,an increasing number of people are beginning to notice that whether the Three Georges Dam is good or bad,especially among the young and heated debates are right on their way.Many experts point out that the drought in the Yangtze River is caused by the Chain reaction of the Three Georges Dam,which led to a loss over 1 billion$.There is no denying the fact that drought is a serious problem:the country authorities should take strong measures to deal with it.
People hold different views toward this phenomenon.Some believe that there are economic benefits such as flood control and hydroelectric power.While some other protest vigorously.In their points,the benefits are really ridiculous and harmful.For one thing,they are concern about the loss of many valuable archaeological and cultural sites,for another,the environmental disruption the dam will cause.
In my view,the Three Georges Dam has its own reference values.However,just like everything has both its good and bad sides,it also has its own disadvantages,such as the pollution and the ecological problems.We should do something such as planting more trees ,adjusting the working time of the sluice to improve the present situation.In a word,the whole society should pay close attention to the problem of the dam,only in this way can we see a better situation in the future.
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1.flood control应该不属于economic benefits吧
2.vigorously意为精力旺盛地,不适合做protest的状语
3.paragraph2第三行,"they are concern about..."中concern 应改为concerned,系动词后明显不应有其他动词
4.谈及三峡的disadvantage时作者提到pollution,个人认为作为水利工程不会带来明显的污染问题,改为geology(地质的)或许更贴切