帮我看下这篇文章啊!会追分……第一步,请找出一些单词拼写,语法,句型等上的错误；第二步,适当地提供一些可以增进文采的单词啊句型之类的；第三步,针对我这篇文章的思想做一些点评.My

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帮我看下这篇文章啊!会追分……
第一步,请找出一些单词拼写,语法,句型等上的错误；第二步,适当地提供一些可以增进文采的单词啊句型之类的；第三步,针对我这篇文章的思想做一些点评.
My hometown
I might have had more happy collection here,and became a happy girl,had I not gone to XS(a name of a city).
Grew up in a small town,and when I was alone,I'd just look at the blue sky above,dreaming of my happy life in the furture.I would take leave of such a poor(not only in mater,but also in spirit)town the next day.I didn't like my hometown at first.However litter can be known of the feelings or views of a people as your neighbour,this truth is so well fixed in the mind of the surrounding families that he is considered as the rightful property to speak of.I found people here would think highly of you when meeting with you,however,wish ill of you when meeting others,including my mother,my father,my aunt.Nothing could be more humble and hypocritical!It made me desprately disappointed.As a child,I thought it just happened in country,I wanna break away!I entertained hopes of being admitted to city,of which I think that suah things would never take place!I left there at the age of 8.
However,I did make a wrong choice.The city,which was fashion and friendly to everyone in my mind,turned to be a jail for me!Almost everyone in my class laught at me just because I came from country.The rest of the night after finishing homework was spent in crying for such a thing falling to my lot.How hard the 4 years in such a school it is!
I knew I must strenghth myself so that nobady could look down on me.I became a girl I never knew.I was cool just like this society.I lost my sensibilities!How is love?How is hate?How is anger?How is sad?Am I a machine?
Now I wanna come back home...
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我的家乡
我可以有更多快乐收集在这里,并成为一个愉快的女孩,我没有去XS的（一城市名称）
成长于一个小城镇,当我独自一,我只希望看看蓝天以上,梦想着我的幸福生活,在furture.i将采取离开这样一个穷人（不仅是在材料,而且在精神）城市未来日子.我不喜欢我的家乡在乱抛垃圾,可以知道的感情或意见,一个人作为您的邻居,这个真理是这么好固定在心中周围的家庭,他是被视为合法财产的发言人.我发现这里的人们会认为你高度评价会晤时,与你,不过,希望生病的你会面时,其他人,包括我的母亲,我的父亲,我姑姑.没有什么可以更谦虚和虚伪!它使我失望.像孩子,我以为这只是碰巧发生在国家,我想打破!受理的希望被接纳到城市,其中我认为suah的事情绝不会发生!我离开有在8岁.
不过,我没有作出错误的选择这个城市,这是时装设计和友好的每个人都在我心目中,原来是一个坐牢我!几乎每个人都在我的班级laught在我所说的,因为我来自国家.着其余的夜结束后的功课是用于在哭,为这样一个东西落在我的运气.how努力四年,在这样的学校,这是!
我知道我必须强制自己,使没有人可以居高临下对我.我成为一个女孩我从来没有知道.我是冷静,就像这社会.我遗失了我的面子!如何是爱,如何是仇恨?是如何愤怒,如何是可悲的呢?我的机器?
现在我想回来在家...