求英语老师帮忙评价并且分析一下这篇英语作文,要求首先指出其中的错误,然后整体评价一下,再细致评价一下,要求细致到分析每个从句,要指出什么语法现象,就像在改这篇英语作文一样.还请

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求英语老师帮忙评价并且分析一下这篇英语作文,要求首先指出其中的错误,然后整体评价一下,再细致评价一下,要求细致到分析每个从句,要指出什么语法现象,就像在改这篇英语作文一样.还请打出你的分数,满分25分.新的学期即将到来,为了使下学期的学习成绩进步、各科成绩优异、不偏科,在此做新学期的打算,如下：
一、做好预习.
二、认真听课.
三、做课堂笔记.
四、做作业.
五、课后复习.As time goes by,our holiday is going to end.In older to do well in every subjects,I have made some decisions.这是第一段,What I want to do is follows.For one thing,I will study by myself before teachers begin the class,for another thing,I will take notes while I am listening to what teachers say carefully,which contribute to my study better.Besides,I am to try doing my homework alone and go over what we have learnt every night.In a word ,I will spear no effort to study.第二段 最后一段,As the old saying goes,Books are the ladder of human progress.thus,it's hight time that we studyed hard everyday.感激不尽

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15分,打错不多,小错不断...our holiday is coming to an end. (固定搭配）In order(可能笔误） to ...in every subject（each,every修饰单数名词）The following is what I want to do. (英语句子一般要前短后长）.....