我写的托福作文,大家帮我改改,我的语法不是很好,有什么毛病尽管指出来Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?ThemostimportanteducationforstudentsshouldbeconductedinclassroomoroutoftheclassroomFr

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我写的托福作文,大家帮我改改,我的语法不是很好,有什么毛病尽管指出来
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The most important education for students should be conducted in classroom or out of the classroom
From my own perspective,study in classroom is as important as out of the classroom.
First in first,no matter which country you are in,it’s compulsory to study in the classroom.The most fundamental and necessary knowledge are teach in there.Only after you have learnt what teacher taught you in class,you have the ability to learn more and do things what you want to.For example,one of my classmates,Zhang Xian Li,he is good at Computer science,but he always failed in English test.Obviously,if you want to master the skills to the computer programming,a good level of English is required.So he compelled to take an English book every time he does his program.This shows the significance of study in the classroom.

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不好意思,不熟悉托福作文哪.不过我觉得这个作文结构肯定是标准的,只是内容貌似不深刻,举例太多,理论说明较少.有不少语法错误.连接词用得不错,说明看过模板.用词有时候不太书面化.考过雅思,公认难度没托福大,按雅思标准,我觉得这个作文在6分左右吧.