帮帮改作文MyViewsonMobilePhone要求1平时你用手机做什么2假设没有手机你会做什么3如何合理的使用手机下面是我写的,求指错啊,求修改,MyViewsonMobilePhoneWiththedevelopmentofsocietyandtechnolog

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My Views on Mobile Phone
要求 1 平时你用手机做什么
2 假设没有手机你会做什么
3 如何合理的使用手机
下面是我写的,求指错啊,求修改,
My Views on Mobile Phone
Withthe development of society and technology ,more and more people own the mobilephone .I like to watch the news and listen the music by mobile phone innormaltimes.Of course ,it ’s very funny to chat with friends online when I have spare time.
If I haven’t mobile phone ,I am willing to read some books in the library andtake part in more activities.in addition,there is no doubt that doing some sports is also a good choice .
As far as I am concerned ,we can use the mobilephone to get more knowledge online and communicate with others in time .However,we shouldn’t spend toomuch time on mobile phone.Mobile phone is just a tool that we can use to meetour needs in the life.

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With the development of society and technology ,more and more people own the mobilephone .I like to 【watch改为read】 the news and listen 【加to】the music 【by改为on】 the mobile phone in 【加my】【 normal改为usual】【 times改为time】.Of course ,it ’s very 【funny改为insteresting】 to chat with friends online when I have spare time.If I haven’t 【加a】mobile phone ,I 【am willing to改为will】 read some books in 【the改为a]】 library and take part in more activities.In addition,there is no doubt that doing some sports is also a good choice .As far as I am concerned ,we can use the mobilephone to get more knowledge online and communicate with others in time .However,we shouldn’t spend too much time on mobile phone.【加The】mobile phone is just a tool that we can use to meet our needs in 【去掉the】 life.