英语作文修改,请大家帮我修改下以下的英语作文:mywintervacationNothingisdifferentonmywintervacation.Inordertofinishhomework,Isavedmyplay-time.soIgotupearlyforaweekinarow.Ifelttiredandstarthelpingmymot

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英语作文修改,
请大家帮我修改下以下的英语作文:
my winter vacation
Nothing is different on my winter vacation.In order to finish homework,I saved my play-time.so I got up early for a week in a row.I felt tired and start helping my mother.It made me relaxed.I usually do some same things in different days.I will be bored.I though.But I could not find anything is interesting.
How time flies!I enjoyed my Spring Festival.Sure,I have gotten some lucky money and visit __(亲朋好友)____
请大家帮我把横线上的词填好,并帮忙写个合适的结尾.如果看到有写得不好的帮忙用好的语句替换,有错的请帮忙修改.

Answer 1

恩..第一句的介词,用about不合适,对于一段时间的话,用during,in 似乎要好一点.第二句,句子顺序不好,因为提前的是重点,我觉得重要的不是为了完成作业,而应该是你节约了时间.而游戏时间用gaming time会好的多.
第三句,sentence fragment,去掉so.至于in a row我不知道这样好不好,不过我比较喜欢i got up early everyday for the whole week.
第四句,恩..不知道你要表达的意思是不是你作业做累了,就帮妈妈做家务....如果是的话,就改成I helped my mother with some housework,when i was tired to continue homework.
第5句.改成,so i could get physical exercise besides（other then） mental practice.
第6句.i planed and separated my work into pieces.Then i could finish one for each day.
7句：It was bored,but at least i done(finished) my homework.
最后：Time flies.The spring festival is over.I get some lucky money(red pockets) from relatives and friends.I really enjoyed my winter.
我没有做大的修改,不过我觉得文章的构思上还有不少问题..比如说既然写寒假,在那么短的作文里面,不如不提春节.或者只写春节.
恩..不知道你是几年级的学生了..单词用的不难..应该没问题吧..