BEC中级PARTONE写作.To:allstaffFrom:derekDate:19Apr.2011Subject:staffrewardAsyouknow,Ourcompany'sprofitshavegoneuprecently,itduetolongtimehardworking.Ireallyappreciateyoureffortsforthedevelopmentofthecompany.Allofyo

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BEC中级PART ONE 写作.
To :all staff
From:derek
Date:19 Apr.2011
Subject:staff reward
As you know,Our company's profits have gone up recently,it due to long time hard working.I really appreciate your efforts for the development of the company.All of you will have a day off and receive a 10% of your salary bonus.
Thank you .
Derek

Answer 1

As you know, Our company's（ profits have gone up(risen) recently含糊的例子）, it due to long time hard working.(含糊的例子) I really appreciate your efforts （for-to） the development of（ the删掉）company. All of you will have a day off and（ receive a 10% of your salary bonus这句表达不清楚）.1举的例子要很明确的例子,要有数据显示,像“有明显增长等这些很含糊的”不行2.言简意赅,主观性不要太强烈.