英文套磁信,大家帮我看一下哪里需要修改,公派读博,Dearprofessor,Hereisthething,IcanonlygetthescholarshiponconditionthatIcanreceiveyouradmissionandsubmitittoCSC(TheChinaScholarshipCouncil).Ideeplyknowthat

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英文套磁信,大家帮我看一下哪里需要修改,公派读博,
Dear professor,Here is the thing,I can only get the scholarship on condition that I can receive your admission and submit it to CSC(The China Scholarship Council).I deeply know that I am not excellent among so many applicants,but I really love doing research in the area I am interested in,and it will always get passionate.I want to explore the possibility that whether I could be accepted by your group.This is a brief resume of mine:
Scores:
GPA:3.4 (ranks top 3 in my department)
TOEFL:109
GRE :157+167
Academic studies and internships:
With a minor degree in Economics provided by XX University
One-year lab experience and presented two papers(on a Chinese journal),as the second-author,
about photosynthetic bacteria Rhodospirillum Rubrum S1.
8-month assistantship in Edmond H.Fischer Signal Transduction Laboratory,under the supervision of professor Fu,our associate dean.
Few internships in biotechnology company and pharmaceutical factory and Biological agriculture company.
Recently,I get a position of an assistant in a biomedical lab under the supervision of professor Wu.
I may not the smartest student,but I must be the happiest student you have ever seen.If you have any question about CSC or my resume,please let me know.
Best regards.

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没有问题 ,不需要修改.