顺便看看可以打多少分拜谢hasbeensaid,"Noteverythingthatislearnediscontainedinbooks."Compareandcontrastknowledgegainedfromexperiencewithknowledgegainedfrombooks.Inyouropinion,whichsourceismoreimportant?Why?When

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has been said,"Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books.In your opinion,which source is more important?Why?
When faced with the saying that "Not everything that is learned is containde in books",quiet a few would deem that the most vital knowledge is gained from experience,but others ,in contrast,believe gaining knowledge from books as the premier choice.As for me,I can not agree more with the former.And there are some conspicuous aspects as follows.
There are many things that only can be acknowledged from experience.An individual would never relize the importance of fighting for success until he failed,a kid would never grow up until he achieved many tasks along,a bird would never be able to fly in the sky until it really tried.So to some degree,the most important knowledge is gained from experience,not from books.
The knowledge we gained from experience is more accurate and useful than that we learned from books.Books are always telling what people found ten years ago,and that would be wrong in many cases.For example,the network.Scientists never refer to books to confirm their experiments' conclusion,they believe in what they see and what they think instead,in other words,they trust what they learned from experience instead of books.And that is just a powerful support for my view.
What is more,the things we learned from experience are hardly discarded compared with knowledge gained from books.We now may clearly remember how we successfully ride a bike the first time,but we will seldom remember what we learned from task books the first time.
Addmittdely,learning from books also has advantages to some extent,because everyone may have easy access to books and can learn a lot of basic knowledge such as charactors and bilolgy from books,and that is just why we attend a school.By the same token,however,we still need to learn from experience rather than books.
General speaking,the most precious knowledge can only be gained from experience rather than books,and things we learned from experiences will never be forgotten till we are old.Taken into all these factors,we may reasonably come to the conclusion that the most vital knowledge should be gained from experience.

Answer 1

首先要说,您这篇文章写得很是不错,关联词语,句间起承转合都不错
在我看来,你的问题在于第一个理由段
这一段虽然例举了三个例子作为论证,然而论证是为笼统,没有覆盖和说服力,倒不如进行详述,捡其中之一进行论述,效果会更好,而且在结尾,你用到important,这是一个新词,显得逻辑不足
一些词语也可以改进,acknowledge可以改成attain,thing可改成tressure,
最后,你的三个理由段长度相当,有点不好,建议缩短其一,加长其二,会好些
鄙人愚见,还望指正.