帮忙批改一篇英语作文,Ⅱ说明：从部门经理（RushCrawford)的名义给公司全体员工发一份内部通知.时间：2007年6月24日事由：有关更换电话系统事宜内容：1.由于业务需要,公司拟更心目前使用

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帮忙批改一篇英语作文,Ⅱ
说明：从部门经理（Rush Crawford)的名义给公司全体员工发一份内部通知.
时间：2007年6月24日
事由：有关更换电话系统事宜
内容：
1.由于业务需要,公司拟更心目前使用的电话系统;
2.现由3个通讯公司提交的更新方案,内容见附件；
3.请员工仔细阅读并提交自己的建议；
4.提交建议的时间：本月底前；
5.公司将与下月初订货.
words for reference:事由 Re 更新 update 附件 attachment
订货 place an order 通讯公司 communications company
Memo
To：All staff Employees
From：__________
Re:_____________
Date:___________
___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________
___________________________________________________
Memo
To:All staff Empolyees
From:Rush crawford
Re:About update the telephone system
Date:June,24,2007
Because of the need in business,company plan to update the telephone system.Now there is a communications company hand in a update plan.The detail please see attachment.Please the workers reading carefully and give sugestions.And the time by the end of this month.The company will place an order at next month early.

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呃,你这个是机译的文章么?
很chinglish.我重新写一遍给你好了.
Memo
To:All staff （staff就是全体员工的意思,不用再添加employee）
From:Rush crawford
Re:Collecting suggestions on telephone system updating.
Date:June,24,2007
Because of the need in business,the company plan to update the telephone system.Now there are update plans from three communications companys .View the attachment for details.We called on all staff to read the update plans carefully and submit your suggestion.The deadline for submitting your suggestion is the end of this month. The company will place an order early next month.改好~~