帮我看看这篇英语文章有没有错误,明天考试了,跪谢Because of the growing economy, job stress become a very common thing to the young people. It affects not only our working but also our daily life. How can we prevent the job stress?

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帮我看看这篇英语文章有没有错误,明天考试了,跪谢
Because of the growing economy, job stress become a very common thing to the young people. It affects not only our working but also our daily life.

How can we prevent the job stress? First of all, pay attention to the changes on our mood , the patterns of our life and our job performance to ascertain if we are under job stress. Second, find a proper balance between the work and our personal life , try not to spend plenty of our time on working after work. . Third, keep the desk organized and put some family photos or potted flowers on it instead of the stacks of the file. Like the saying goes——out of sight, out of mind.

There are also three pieces of advice of how to deal with the job stress. Firstly, get along well with our colleagues. Cooperating with them will share your pressure. And the harmonious environment will calm the impetuous heart. Second, the goals can easy to complete by separating them into many sections. Thirdly, when we feel stressful, we may try to punching the pillows, shouting or doing high intensity exercise to vent out the pressure.

I believe that if we treat the stress in a correct way, it will finally turn into a impetus to take us to a better place at work!
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Because of the growing economy, job stress become(要加 "s")) a very common thing to (去掉 the) young people. It affects not only our (working 改为 works)but also our daily life.
How can we prevent (去掉the) job stress? First of all, pay attention to the changes (on改为 of) our mood(加 "s") , the patterns of our life and our job performance to ascertain if we are under job stress. Second(加ly), find a proper balance between (the work 改为 works) and our personal life , try not to spend (plenty 改为 too much) of our time on working after work. . Third(ly), keep the desk organized and put some family photos or potted flowers on it instead of the stacks of the file. Like the saying goes——out of sight, out of mind.
There are also three pieces of advice of how to deal with (去掉the) job stress. Firstly, (加 try to) get along well with our colleagues. Cooperating with them will share your pressure. And the harmonious environment will calm the impetuous heart. Second(ly), the goals can (加 be more) easy to complete by separating them into many sections. Thirdly, when we feel stressful, we may try to (punching 改为 punch 或去掉 to) (去掉the) pillows, shouting or doing high intensity exercise to vent out the pressure.
I believe that if we treat (去掉the) stress in a correct way, it will finally turn into (去掉a) impetus (to take us to a better place at work 改为 and would make our works more enjoyable!)