英文邮件,请各位大侠指点下哪里不合适,并请改正,（开头、结尾省略）ItisveryluckyformethatyoureadmyE-mail.Andthankyousomuchforyourappreciation.Thankyouforyoursuggestionverymuch,butitishardformetoa

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英文邮件,请各位大侠指点下哪里不合适,并请改正,（开头、结尾省略）
It is very lucky for me that you read myE-mail.And thank you so much for your appreciation.
Thank you for your suggestion very much,but it is hard for me to apply for scholarships in China.However,I will trymy best to apply.On the other side,my financial situation can support me tofinish school in Japan without delaying my studies.By the way,my main purposegoing to Japan is nothing but exploring public health field more deeply and theadmiration for you.
If I cannot apply for a scholarshipsuccessfully,could I have the chance to be your research student?

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It is very lucky that you read my E-mail.And thank you so much for your appreciation and suggestion.But it is hard for me to apply for scholarships in China.However,I will try my best.On the other hand,my financial condition can support me to finish school in Japan without delaying my studies.By the way,my reasons of going to Japan is nothing else but exploring public health field more deeply and the admiration for you.
If I cannot apply for a scholarship successfully,could I have the chance to be your research student?
英语表达讲究简洁不重复,所以我的修改都是基于这个原则.还有就是一些用词的修改.