考研08年作文的第二段这是我写的,麻烦帮我改一下看有哪些错误或用法不太好的地方,Thissketchdoesreflectathought-provokingsocialphenomenonwhichisnotuncommomnow:Itisteamworkthatmakesusstronger.Apparently,

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考研08年作文的第二段
这是我写的,麻烦帮我改一下看有哪些错误或用法不太好的地方,
This sketch does reflect a thought-provoking social phenomenon which is not uncommom now:It is teamwork that makes us stronger.Apparently,two single-legged men are naturally associated with individuals and corporations lacking of some advantages.There is no denying that people simply rely on personal capabilitis cannot defeat their opponents,for competion goes increasingly fierce in businesses of every variety.A case in point is the mergers and acquisitions of corporations,which makes companys form enormous potential by the currency of capital ,techniques and talents.If we abandon ourselves to despair of our undesirable aspects rather than working with others,we cannot make progress by leaps and bounds forever.

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仔细看了,没有.想挑挑不出啊.
上过新东方吧?
写的不错!继续加油!