求有DIY英国签证经验者看一看我写的邀请信行不行,拜谢!InvitationLetterforPingWangToWhomitmayconcern:IamwritingtoconfirmthatPingWang,bornon19thJune1961,ismymother,andIwouldliketoinvitehertovisitmeinN

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求有DIY英国签证经验者看一看我写的邀请信行不行,拜谢!
Invitation Letter for Ping Wang
To Whom it may concern:
I am writing to confirm that Ping Wang,born on 19th June 1961,is my mother,and I would like to invite her to visit me in Nottingham from 2014-12-7 until 2014-12-17.The main purpose of her visit is to attend my graduation ceremony and by the way have a short tour in Britain.Her visit to the UK,including the international air-tickets and local accommodation will be at her own expense,and she has provided the financial evidence.
I am a student at the University of Nottingham.I have enclosed a student status letter which confirms that I am studying Chinese/English Translation and Interpreting MA and I am entitled to invite two guests for my graduation ceremony.I am due to complete my course in June 2014 and will then graduate in mid December.
I would be very grateful if you would approve the request for her visa so that she can attend my graduation ceremony.I hope the necessary visa arrangements can be made as soon as possible.Please check the following evidence of mein:
1.A copy of my passport and my student visa
2.A copy of my residence permit ID card
3.A copy of my student card issued by the University of Nottingham
4.Letter from the university confirming my registration
5.A copy of my Police Registration Certificate
Thanks a lot!
Yours faithfully
Yibei Zhao

Answer 1

没什么大问题


提几个小建议：
可以开头先说清楚自己的信息,学校,专业,学号 什么时候毕业,毕业典礼时间
建议写清楚这段时间你母亲住在哪里
可以适当写一下带你母亲在英游玩的计划
I hope the necessary visa arrangements can be made as soon as possible.这句话建议删掉
最后留个你的联系方式和 亲笔签名 比较好


一人之见啦~