如今手机在中学生当中使用越来越普遍，同学就“校园内是否可以使用手机”进行讨论同学们对此各抒己见.请你给编辑写一封信，反映讨论情况并谈谈你自己的观点。赞同不赞

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如今手机在中学生当中使用越来越普遍，同学就“校园内是否可以使用手机”进行讨论同学们对此各抒己见. 请你给编辑写一封信，反映讨论情况并谈谈你自己的观点。

赞同	不赞同	你的观点
1. 方便联系	1．学校有公用电话	…
2. 突发事故，可求助	2．玩游戏 ，影响学习
3. 课余可放松自己	3. 浪费时间，金钱

注意：1. 开头部分已给出，不计入总词数；2可适当增加细节和连接词，使文章通顺连贯3.词数：100左右
Dear Editor
Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.                                                                   
                                                                               
                                                                               
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Yours truly
Wang Lin

Answer 1

Dear Editor Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students My schoolmates have different opinions. Some think it is convenient to get in touch with others with the cell-phone which also makes you feel safe especially in time of trouble. Besides We can relax ourselves by playing them when we’re tired of our studies.While others think differently. First the cell-phone in not a must in school as there are some IC phones there making it easy to call others. Second many students often play e -games and send e-massages with their cell-phones even in class which will surely have bad effects on their study. Worse is to come it will result in a great waste of time and money. In my opinion the cell-phone is a useful tool in our daily life. But it doesn't mean we can use freely in school. (it’s not wrong to follow the fashion but the most important thing is how to use the mobile phone in a right way.)Yours truly Wang Lin 解析
分 析：
考查提纲类作文。本文属于提纲里作文中常见的给材料作文。话题是校园内是否可以使用手机，文章的要点都已经以表格形式给出，考生只需要做适当的串联，用合适的连接词把这些分开的要点连接词起来如first second， Worse is to come 等。本文中可以使用倒装句，把表示地点的介词短语提起，后面使用全部倒装。同时变化使用不同的句式，让文章更富有变化，提升文章的档次。如Some think it is convenient to get in touch with others with the cell-phone which also makes you feel safe especially in time of trouble.这句话里面有非限制性定语从句，the cell-phone in not a must in school as there are some IC phones there making it easy to call others这句话是现在分词做结果状语。
考点：
考查提纲类短文的写作。
点评：
对于提纲类短文最重要的是不要遗漏要点，所有的要点要全面覆盖，在写作的时候要使用合适的连接词和高级句型让文章更流畅更有层次。