哪位大侠帮我看看这段英文有什么句法错误没?wemaystillkeepsomethinginmindthatsomeonehelpedtheelderlyfalling,butcoughtinablackmail.whatacomedy,especiallywhenitresultsinananiousfeelingwhenpassbyattempttoo

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哪位大侠帮我看看这段英文有什么句法错误没?
we may still keep something in mind that someone helped the elderly falling ,but cought in a blackmail.what a comedy,especially when it results in an anious feeling when passby attempt to offer helping hands and finally giving up.

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首先,最好不要用may,这是中式英语最明显的用法,外国人基本不用这个词,might都比它好一些.其次,定语从句something后面没有紧跟着that引导的从句,从整体句式上看十分不流畅,有点拼凑的感觉,真正的英语实用是非常实用和简洁的,如果可以不用从句,选择简单句表达会更清晰,从句毕竟比较冗长.这里的help没必要用过去式,加s即可,elder后面不能加ly,然后,后面的falling是想说摔倒么?主动摔倒用的是ing,显然这里应该用被动,如果怕表述不清楚,可以加个地点,比如the elder fell down on the road,摔倒在路上的老年人.but引导的并列句实在是太罗嗦,直接用简单句为好,What首字母大写,Especially首字母大写,两个when显得句子十分重叠,而且用法不对,看到这儿我实在是觉得,没必要用从句~从英国刚回来的小海龟建议您在不精通从句的情况下尽量用简单句,平时外国人都是这样用的,只有中国学生才会用这种晦涩粗糙的从句~