请高手批改一下我写的英文请假单刚刚写了一份请假单,想请一周假去复习,但不知道自己写得如何,请高手指正一下我写得不好或语法用得不好的地方.DearXXX:Iam,recently,themoreobligedbymymainex

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请高手批改一下我写的英文请假单
刚刚写了一份请假单,想请一周假去复习,但不知道自己写得如何,请高手指正一下我写得不好或语法用得不好的地方.
Dear XXX :
I am,recently,the more obliged by my main examination,thought I spend much spare time to it; and,to put into my greatful vigor of it.
I am writing this letter with deep-felt regards to you about my tremendous worry in the problem that I am having not enough time to prepare in taking part in it.
And,I would be very grateful if could be approved a five days of the annual leave.
Enclose,please find my request for leave.
谢谢wiiiztyb大的不错的文,可是我不是求写内容,而是想知道,我这样的写法如果有问题,那么它是出在那里?

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Dear XXX,
I would like to request a five-day leave using my annual vacation days,starting 200x-xx-xx till 200x-xx-xx.
Attached please find my vacation request form.
I need these five days to study and better prepare myself for my upcoming main examination.
Your kind approval will be highly appreciated.
Regards,

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你原来的问题是太繁琐了.如果你的老板是外国人,那你这样写是绝对中式的英文,外国人是会不知你所云.请假是一件简单的事,一般的外国人士是认为理所当然的事,你不用抱歉,或多方解释.像这一个简单的请假信,你只要,
- 直截了当说你要干什么.==〉要请五天假,从几月几日到几月几日.
- 简单说明,请假原因.==〉要用这五天读准备考试.
- 结尾客气话一句.==〉中文相当于,“请准予我所请”.
- 签名,了事.
不要文绉绉绕来绕去,一看就是（对不起说一句得罪人的坦白话）英文不懂的人写的.在外国公司当经理这么多年,外国人很少写个长篇大论来请个假,很多都只是口头说一声,再补个正式的假单,就完事了.