最近我英语写了两篇作文，之前写的都不太好，希望大神们可以指点一下第一篇：题目：今天你和你朋友Jack在他家举办了一次庭院拍卖会。根据下面提示，写一篇80词左右的短文。提示：略

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最近我英语写了两篇作文，之前写的都不太好，希望大神们可以指点一下
第一篇：
题目：今天你和你朋友Jack在他家举办了一次庭院拍卖会。根据下面提示，写一篇80词左右的短文。提示：略
我写的：Today my friend Jack and I have had ayard sale in his home.We were selling the old books、toys and an old bicycle while the moring begining.There were many people came to our yard sale to buy things.in the end ,we had more than 80 dollors,we thought that although it was hard,it was happy.We want to use these money to buy snacks and toys.
This is a happy day,I want to have again.
我想的是:今天我朋友杰克和我在他家举办了一个庭院拍卖会。我们从早上开始时就买了旧书、玩具和一辆旧自行车。有很多人来我们的庭院拍卖会买东西。在最后，我们赚到了80多美元，我们觉得尽管那很累，但它也很开心。我们想用这些钱买点心和玩具。
这是开心的一天，我想在有一次（这样的一天）。
第二篇：
题目：假如你是李冰，请根据要点提示给你的朋友Linda写一封电子邮件，向她叙述一下你最近的情况。提示：略
我写的：（开头和结尾是卷子提供的，我就不写了，请原谅）
Let me say that what codition about me.
The exam is over,so I have a holiday at home,but I'm very busy now.My father has bought a computer for me,so I have to take computer lessons every night,it's so boring,
and because this,my eves may have some matter.Can you imagine my feelings?
我想的是：让我说说我的情况。
考试已经结束了，所以我在家休假，但是我现在很忙。我爸爸给我买了台电脑，所以我每晚都不得不去上电脑课，那太无聊了，并且因为这个，我的眼睛好像出了什么问题。你能想象我的感受吗？
谢谢

Answer 1

第一篇时态有问题，应该换成一般过去式 例如We sold old books ,toys and an old bicycle before 8:30 另外语法有错误 例如There were mang peopie coming...