请帮我修改两篇英语作文,英语高手请入（悬赏50分）1、Thanksforyourquestion.IthinkI’mthemostimportantpersonin2010.First.In2010,“starofoutlookEnglishtalentcompetition”letmebelieveIhavetodoeverythingby

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请帮我修改两篇英语作文,英语高手请入（悬赏50分）
1、 Thanks for your question.I think I’m the most important person in 2010.
First.In 2010,“star of outlook English talent competition”let me believe I have to do everything by myself.So I think I’m the most important person to me.
Second.My families and friends all love me.In 2010,I’m joining “star of outlook English talent competition”.They give me much help and hope me can carry the competition.So I think I’m the very important to my families and friends.
Thank you!
2、 Thanks for your question.
I have some advantages,for example:I’m good at all subjects .I think I can sing songs and write stories well.I’m good with everyone and I ’m good at talk with foreigners.
I also have some disadvantages,like I am so lazy、I usually forget some things、I’m a little bit shy and more.
But I think my biggest disadvantage is always can find some disadvantages and my biggest advantage is can improve my disadvantages.
Thank you

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总的来说没什么大错,我认为部分语气和表达方式不是很合适,略做了调整,仅供参考：
1、 Thanks for your question.I think I’m the most important person in 2010.
First.I can learn one thing from“star of outlook English talent competition”hosted in 2010,I have to do everything by myself.So is to say,I’m the most important person to myself.
Second.My families and friends all love me.when I take part in“star of outlook English talent competition”,they all stand behind me and encourage me that I am the NO.1 and I can carry the competition.So I think I’m also very important to my families and friends.
Thank you!
2、 Thanks for your question.
I have so many advantages,for example:I’m good at study,singing and writing.I’m kind and freindly with people around me .
I also have few disadvantages,such as I am a little bit lazy、I don't have a very good memory 、and I’m shy .
But I think my biggest disadvantage is that I can always find my disadvantages and my biggest advantage is that I can always improve my disadvantages.
Thank you !