两篇英语稿,求帮忙修改啊、、在线等参加比赛用的,找不到老师了、、字数超了,只贴一篇,另一篇重新提问MyPersonalStatementHello,everyone,I'mFiona,asilentgirlwhowascomesfromabeautifultown,

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两篇英语稿,求帮忙修改啊、、在线等
参加比赛用的,找不到老师了、、
字数超了,只贴一篇,另一篇重新提问
My Personal Statement
Hello, everyone, I'm Fiona, a silent girl who was comes from a beautiful town, is sixteen years old. I love computer very much, and to be a great hacker is my dream .Hacker is a group of people who were well versed in computer, and they are good at math and English, the most important is they obey the Hacker Spirit, it’s the only difference between hacker and cracker.
I know to be a great hacker is difficult ,so I will work hard for it .The first step I will do is study hard ,especially in math and English ; then I will learn the knowledge about computer technology from my father to improve myself in my spare time . That’s me, a girl who has a dream, what’s about yours?
这个需要再加一两句话,我词穷了….不知道怎么加

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稿呢?