Dearhostfamily:It'smypleasuretospendmysummerwithyou.Ihopethatwecanhaveagoodtime!First,letmeintroducemyself.I'ma16year-old-girl,studyinginChengduNo.7highschool.I'minsenior1.Sometimes,ilikeswimming,takingphotosandpl

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Dear host family:
It's my pleasure to spend my summer with you.I hope that we can have a good time!
First,let me introduce myself.I'm a 16 year-old-girl,studying in Chengdu No.7 high school.I'm in senior 1.Sometimes,i like swimming,taking photos and playing the zither(a kind of Chinese traditional instrument).I'm not a shy girl,but when i meet someone strange i will feel embarrassed.If you know more about me,you will find that i am an outgoing girl.
I'm looking forward to being together with you.I want to improve my spoken English and speaking skills.And i want to learn some table manners from having meals with you.I'll cook some Chinese traditional food for you,i hope you would like it.
Yours,
Blair

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Dear host family,（英语中在信开头的称呼后用逗号,不用冒号）
How are you doing?I hope everything is going well with you.（信的开头先问候一下）
It will be my pleasure to spend the （因为夏天是要和他们一起过的,用my口气有点自我）summer with you.I hope that we will have a good time together.First,let me briefly （简要的） introduce myself.I am a 16-year-old girl studying at （学校是个小地方,用at,一般in后面跟城市或国家）Chengdu No.7 High School （校名大写）.I am in grade 10.（高一相当于10年纪,老外不一定会知道senior 1是什么概念）.（说兴趣爱好时不用加sometimes）I like swimming,photography,and playing the Guzheng (a traditional Chinese zither-like instrument)（zither是西方的一种乐器,说古筝是类似于zither的乐器会好点).I am generally not shy,but I may feel a little embarrassed with strangers.You will find me an outgoing girl once you know me better.
（把期待和对方见面的话移到信的最后了）When we stay together,I would like to （用虚拟语气客气一些）learn some history and culture of （房东的国家）,to improve my spoken English,and to learn table manners from you （觉得后面的from having meals with you有点累赘,删掉了）.I will cook some authentic and traditional Chinese food （traditional用来修饰Chinese food,放在前面）for you and hope that you will enjoy it.
I am looking forward to getting together with you soon!
Sincerely yours,
Blair