Cet6作文请各位大侠看看有什么语法上的问题伐?livingwithparentsaftergraduationEveryyear,therearealotofgraduatescomingtothecurrentsociety.Someofthemarewillingtostrivefortheirbetterlifebythemselves,butnowm

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Cet6 作文 请各位大侠看看有什么语法上的问题伐?living with parents after graduation
Every year,there are a lot of graduates coming to the current society.Some of them are willing to strive for their better life by themselves,but now more and more graduates choose to live together with their parents.
The reason for this strange phenomenon is obvious.Firstly,both the high price of housing and the stress of work are the biggest factor.Graduates can't afford an apartment or rent it with so little wage,and they are too busy to have enough time to make supper.On the other hand,students ,in current life ,are lack of some ambition,comparing to our parents.last ,these reason lead them to living with their parents.
In my view .I think a lot of thing are doomed ,beyond our control ,such as the background of our family ,parent's estate,and everyone is living in a diferent surrounding.So ,parents can't claim their children to live by themselves,but must urge kids to strive .

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"these reason lead them to living with their parents."这里的 "reason" 应该改为 "reasons"吧,同样的,"I think a lot of thing are doomed ,beyond our control “thing"改为"things","control"改为"controls",其他就没发现了,待楼下补充..