大家帮忙修改一下啊,能加的就加,我是初一的啊!MyfavoritefestivalisSpringFestival.It'sthefirstfestivalinChina.attheday,peoplecookmanytraditionalfood,wearnewclothesandsoon.Childrenlikethefestivalverymuch,b

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大家帮忙修改一下啊,能加的就加,我是初一的啊!
My favorite festival is Spring Festival.It's the first festival in China.at the day,people cook many traditional food , wear new clothes and so on. Children like the festival very much ,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get some money from their parents.Mothers have bought clothes for them child.The clothes are very beautiful .Children like the festlife very much. At Spring Festival,people go and visit their frients and family.In the evenning,people can puts the fireworks and see Spring Festival Party.It's wonderful! At the Spring Festival night twelve o’clock,people eat dumplings with money,stand for safe. It is really a happy festival.

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It's the first festival in China这句听着有点奇怪的说,我句的可以改成it means a new biginning of a new year in china.
people cook many traditional food 中many 有点不妥吧,可改为many kinds of
them child.改成their chil还 有哦,你好象把Children like the festlife very much说了两边哦
At the Spring Festival night twelve o’clock可以改成on spring festival at 12o’clock in the night,people eat dumplings with money,stand for safe这句我没看懂哦!就这些吧