MySpringFestivalMySpringFestivalwasgreat.BeforetheChineseNewYear,myfamilieswereallgoingtomygrandparents’house.Manyofmyrelationstherewereplayedallthenight.Atnight,wesetofffirecrackers.Thevoicewasveryloud,carsparke

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My Spring Festival
My Spring Festival was great.Before the Chinese New Year,my families were all going to my grandparents’ house.Many of my relations there were played all the night.At night,we set off firecrackers.The voice was very loud,cars parked far from us were sounding.Maybe they fear the voice too.
The first day of the Chinese New Year,we all got up early.We said “Happy New Year!” or “Good luck this year!” to each other and get money from them.We visited our relations all day.That made me feel very tired but very happy because I also can get money.
The second day of the New Year,I slept during the morning.In the afternoon,I went to the beautiful countryside,and visited the Yi River,it is very broad,about 1 kilometer.
Next day,we left my grandparents’ home for Qingdao.The expressway had frozen.It was terrible!So we could only run by at a slow speed.
This festival was great,I love Spring Festival!

Answer 1

my families -> my family.这里family是集合名词,表示家庭所有成员
my grandparents' house这里house可以不要
Many of my relations -> Many relatives.下同,relations改成relatives
were played -> were playing
fear -> feared
The first day ...-> On the first day ...,下同,加On
it is very broad这里用wide比较好
had frozen -> had been frozen
Chinglish味道重了些