帮我的英语作文挑毛病Hello,everyone!Myname'sZhuYuxiao.YoucancallmeSophie.I'mtwelveyearsold.I'mamindedgirl.I'mfromClass3Grade6andI'magoodstudentinourclass.IdowellinEnglish.Ihaveahappyfamily.Therearefivepeo

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帮我的英语作文挑毛病
Hello,everyone!
My name's Zhu Yuxiao.You can call me Sophie.I'm twelve years old.I'm a minded girl.I'm from Class 3 Grade 6 and I'm a good student in our class.I do well in English.
I have a happy family.There are five people in my family.They are my grandpa,my grandma,my father,my mother and I.My father is a worker.He's very clever.He is always hardworking.My mother is a worker,too.And she is a good cook at home.My grandpa and grandma are both park keepers.They are always kind to others.I love them very much.
My ideal is to be a singer or a DJ.I like to be a Friend of the Earth,don't you?
Do you want to be my friends?
Thank you.

Answer 1

.I'm a minded girl
minded这里意思不清楚
minded很少单独用来形容人
通常是simple minded
open minded等
如果是指喜欢思考或类似意思的话
可以考虑用
thoughtful
My ideal is to be...
改为
I want to be a...
Do you want to be my friends?
改为
Do you want to be my friend?
They are my grandpa,my grandma,my father,my mother and I.
语法上
用I 是对的
但口语上
较多人会用 me