请问这个英语有语病没Whiletherealsosoundsanoppositevoice,whichclaims……这是第一个套句DespitemanybenefitsfromXX,therearestillsomedefectsthatcannotbeignored.这是第二个然后我想把这两句结合在一起变

Question

请问这个英语有语病没
While there also sounds an opposite voice,which claims……这是第一个套句
Despite many benefits from XX,there are still some defects that cannot be ignored.这是第二个
然后我想把这两句结合在一起变成
While there also sounds an opposite voice,which claims despite many benefits from XX,there are still some defects that cannot be ignored.
可不可以,如果不可以有什么方法能把这两句结在一起呢

Answer 1

第一个套句有很大的问题.一般用it sounds,不用there sounds.另外,前面用while开头,表示“尽管”的意思,后面又出现which,使得这个句子不完整.
第二个套句的问题是,前面用despite,后面又跟了个still.这不是正确的英语.应该二选一.
修改如下：
This may sound an opposite voice. Despite many benefits from XX, there are some defects that cannot be ignored.