写了一篇英文诗歌,每一句最后一字押韵,希望懂英语的人修改指点ZhuHaiMarathonjoinsinhope,Thousandpeoplefromaroundtheworld,EveryoneiswaitingforthestartsingalSoamazingandabsolutelywonderful,Comeon!Andherewe

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写了一篇英文诗歌,每一句最后一字押韵,希望懂英语的人修改指点
ZhuHai Marathon joins in hope,
Thousand people from around the world,
Everyone is waiting for the start singal
So amazing and absolutely wonderful,
Come on!And here we go!
landscape is charming very beautiful,
Two legs just like the rolls,
Sweat is serious overload,
No matter how fast or Slow,
Run for love enjoy the life show!
Rain and cold the weather is terrible,
After storm will be a rainbow,
Up and down is normal
Holding on or letting go,
No such thing as perfect successful!
Keep the beat,stay on the road,
Find a way your love most,
Stand till the last and you are hero
You know,nothing is impossible
When you believe the best comes tomorrow!
这个诗歌是我上一年去珠海跑马拉松的感觉分享,请大侠们指点下我的语法、用语和修饰,

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第二句Thousand people from around the world,
建议改为thousands of people are on the road
第四句So amazing and absolutely wonderful
建议改为How amaing and wonderful as I have told
第六句landscape is charming very beautiful,
建议改为landscape is so charming and beautiful,
第十四句Holding on or letting go,
建议改为Breaking up the inside and front wall
第十八句Stand till the last and you are hero
建议改为stand till the last and the blood is not cold