我写了一片关于newmedia的作文~帮我看看啦~是几分?我很用心写的哦~Newmediahasbecomeinflutencetoourlifenowadays.Somepeoplethinkitisanegativedevelopment.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree我的目标是写

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我写了一片关于 new media 的作文~帮我看看啦~是几分?我很用心写的哦~
New media has become influtence to our life nowadays.Some people think it is a negative development.
To what extent do you agree or disagree
我的目标是写作6.我今年7月考哦~:)))
New media is frequently refer to as cyberculture,and it has been gaining it popularity at an fantastic rate.Some people argue that it is a negative development.
Ineed,new media such as online games may trigger off people's psychological problems.For another,there is a shape rise in the number of cyber crime.However,in my opinion,new media brings us positive more than negative.
Firstly,new media is an ideal form for communication that enable and facilitate user-to-user interactivity.It makes a tremendous contribute to promptly report to all the world,especially during the disaster or in the war.For example,we can get directly information about Libya events through new media like the internet or cell phone newspaper.Nothing seems more simple and directly than use these forms of new media.Without that,the valuable information would delay to report and the serious consequences could not be estimate.
Those who strongly insist that more negative the new media lay too much emphasis on the individual or society problems.An internet-addicted person tends to isolated,self-contered and unsociable.Companys were bankrupted by the cyber crime.New media is a product of the science and techology development.To quote current catch-phrase "new media is not allpowerful,but no new media is completely useless." If no "new media" these problems would not happen Of course,not
We must admit that new media would result in some bad things.However,the harm that new media brings to people and society is exaggerated.Take Japan nuclear events as an example,without new media such as communications internet or communications satellite,other countries could not know capital importance event in the first time,and do not help the disaster area as soon as possible.The injuries and deaths would be much more serious.
To sum up,i do not think that it is a negative developement about new media.The new media brings us great convenience and efficiency.Also the new media accelerates the flow of informations and spreads news to all corners of the globe in time.

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都是你自己写的吗?有没有套模板啊?
你的作文有很多的小语法错误 但是大体上表达还行,有些单词,词组还可以多样化一下,不要老用bring about什么的,分数应该有6+吧