那个啥.帮咱看一下咱的英语作文对不.咱低水平.==.Helloeveryone!I'mverygladtostandheretointrodutionmyself.Ihopeicanmakeagoodperformancetoday.I'mfromClass9Grade7.IhavestudiedinCZFLSformorethan10months.

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那个啥.帮咱看一下咱的英语作文对不.咱低水平.= =.
Hello everyone!I'm very glad to stand here to introdution myself.I hope i can make a good performance today.I'm from Class 9 Grade 7.I have studied in CZFLS for more than 10 months.
　　My friends also say,I am very shy in the classes.But after classes I am an outgoing person who like playing and having fun.Also ,I have lots of hobbies.For example,I like reading,listening to music,surfing the Internet and so on.
I get on well with my Geograpgy.I always get good grades in it.But I am weak in English and Chinese.So I study in this class.I hope I can improve my English.I make up my mind to do my best.
　　I am a cheerful girl.I always smile,because It can make anyone happy and warm.It’s not like enthusiastic laughter,but just warm,makes your heart warm.
顺便问下.I have studied in CZFLS for more than 10 months.　这句话.我是想说：我在CZFLS已经学习了10月了.我这样写对不对.怎样用【现在完成时】说这句话.
I also have a happy family.There are four menbers:my mon,dad,my grandma and me.People whom live in my house always help with each other.It is warm and happiness.

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Hello everyone! I'm very glad to stand here to introdution【introduce】 myself. I hope i can make a good performance today. I'm from Class 9 Grade 7.I have studied in CZFLS for more than 10 months. 　　
　　My friends also say, I am very shy in the classes【in class】. But after classes【class】 I am an outgoing person who like【likes】 playing and having fun【and having fun去掉】. Also ,I have lots of hobbies.For example, I like reading, listening to music, surfing the Internet and so on.
I get on well with my Geograpgy.【I do well in Geography】 I always get good grades in it. But I am weak in English and Chinese. So I study in this class. I hope I can improve my English. I make up my mind to do my best.
　　I am a cheerful girl. I always smile, because It can make anyone【eveyone】 happy and warm.It’s not like enthusiastic laughter, but just warm, makes your heart warm.
顺便问下.I have studied in CZFLS for more than 10 months. 　这句话.我是想说：我在CZFLS已经学习了10月了.我这样写对不对.怎样用【现在完成时】说这句话.【你写的正确, 也可以说I have been studying in CZFLS for more than 10 months】
I also have a happy family. There are four menbers【members】:my mon【mom】,dad,my grandma and me.People whom live in my house【把前面改成my family】 always help with 【with去掉】each other. It is 【加上a】warm and happiness.【把happiness改为happy family】