有的钻石像玻璃球那么大.那人竭力想证明那钻石是真货.我们路过一家商店时,他将一颗钻石使劲地往橱窗上一按,在玻璃上留下一道深痕.我花了半个多小时才摆脱了他的纠缠.Somediamondswerebig

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有的钻石像玻璃球那么大.那人竭力想证明那钻石是真货.我们路过一家商店时,他将一颗钻石使劲地往橱窗上一按,在玻璃上留下一道深痕.我花了半个多小时才摆脱了他的纠缠.
Some diamonds were big as glass ball. The seller instantly wanted to prove that the diamonds were real. When we were passing a stop, he pressed a diamond on the window and left a deep trace on it. I spend half an hour to get rid of his tangle.
这句英语有错吗?若有,请就这段话指出.
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Some diamonds were big as glass ball.The seller instantly wanted to prove that the diamonds were real.When we were passing a stop,he pressed a diamond on the window and left a deep trace on it.I spend half an hour to get rid of his tangle.
Some of those diamonds were as big as marbles.那些钻石之中,你说的是某一堆钻石而不是所有钻石,用those比较明晰.glass ball玻璃球可大可小,用marbles弹珠让人有个较清晰的概念.
instantly是立即,即刻的意思,你是想用insistantly吧?the seller可以是售货员,带有较正统售卖的意思,如果用vendor（小贩）较适合这在街上发生的事.when we were passing a shop那打错了stop.
deep trace(trace一般是踪迹的意思,在这里用不大合适）deep gash（gash很深的伤痕,划痕）较好.
I spend half an hour应该用过去式spent因为是已经发生的事你才会讲这个事件,对吗?
to get rid of his tangle 这里的tangle是个动词,你这样些把这动词变成了名词,不妨写为to get rid of him或用tanglement（名词）to get out of his tanglement
一些小毛病甚至不能称为错误,有的甚至是写作技巧的问题而已.你写的已经要比很多在百度回答英文问题的人要好太多了.是在写什么?有点好奇