请帮忙看看此语法对吗?中英文对吗?以免中国人在老外面前丢脸Aboutthefollowingcharges,wouldyourethinkandadjustforamoreappropriateway.Andforthisfreight,thepurposewastotrytosaveanothercargoburden,andcause

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请帮忙看看此语法对吗?中英文对吗?以免中国人在老外面前丢脸
About the following charges,would you rethink and adjust for a more appropriate way.
And for this freight,the purpose was to try to save another cargo burden,and cause the defect.
If followed our original way of packing,it would be working perfect.I hope we have a long term cooperation after this,and to lower the following fees.Thank you very much.
关于以下的扣款,是否贵司可以考虑适当的调整一下.
关于此次装箱主要是为贵司考虑节省一个货柜,所造成包装不良.
如果按最初我们的设计的包装方式,肯定是没有问题的.
期待着后续大家的长期合作,希望可以调低以下的扣款.
非常非常感谢

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改不好 你参考下
About the charge you asked,could you please think again and adjust a more appropriate way.And about the freight this time,our purpose was to try to save another cargo burden,which caused some defect unfortunately.
Although,if followed our original way of packing,it would be working perfect.We hope it will be a long term cooperation between our two companies in the furture and please consider to lower the following charge fees.
Thank you very much and a cordial working relationship will be respect.