请帮我改改这段英语,是改错,不是翻译~Next,withoutadultsupervision,we’lldowrongthings.Ifyoumoveawayfromhome,yourparentscan’tsuperviseyou.Theycanvisityousometimes,butforthemostoftime,youarealoneandyoucando

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请帮我改改这段英语,
是改错,不是翻译~
Next,without adult supervision,we’ll do wrong things.If you move away from home,your parents can’t supervise you.They can visit you sometimes,but for the most of time,you are alone and you can do anything you want.In this case,it is very easy for teenagers to make bad friends.As we are still young and we don’t have many social experiences,so we come easily under the influence of gang of friends.In addition,alcohol,drugs and cigarettes are always a serious problem among young people.Without parents’ supervision,the problem may get worse.Another factor that influences gravely young people is computer games.This will solicit them abandon their study.But if they live with theirs parents at home,their parents can stop them as soon as possible.In a word,moving away from home and living alone can let young people go to a wrong way,because their guardians can’t guide them.

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adult supervision感觉该换成大人们"的"指点. we will do wrong things.语气有点坚决,可以来个"probably"move away是搬的远远的.觉得可以改成move out.搬出去就好.第三行前面加个although吧.不改..也行. for the mos...