高考英语作文求批改（30分）(04浙江卷)DearSteve,I’msopleasedtolearnthatyouandyourclassmatesarelearningChinese.I’dliketorecommendthefollowingtwodictionaries.OnceIgotthebookstoreIhaveseensucha

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高考英语作文求批改（30分）(04浙江卷)
Dear Steve,
　　I’m so pleased to learn that you and your classmates are learning Chinese.
　　I’d like to recommend the following two dictionaries.
Once I got the book store I have seen such a great dictionary named The English-Chinese Chinese-English Dictionary (ECCED).It has included 18000 English words and 20000 Chinese words .Much to my surprise ,it only takes you fifty two RMB.Many great example and the manner of using the words have been collected.Of course ,as for me ,I prefer Xinhua Dictionary (XD)more.It must be more suitable for the new learners to study Chinese.
It may be a great help to you .Please let me know if you want me to buy these dictionaries.
　　Yours,
　　Li Yue

Answer 1

总体不错.但有 点生硬,有几个 小错误.把has included 改为 includes好些,因为这是 对事实的 叙述,用一般现在时态好些.把takes改为costs好些,虽然都有花费的 意思,但若果 用takes的话,最好后面要 加to do sth.还有50 和2之间要加—号.example要改为examples,因为前面是many.manner要 改为复数,因为单词 的 用法有 好多. 去掉more好 些,因为prefer就 有更喜欢的 意思. must be 改为is 好些,must be 太绝对了.最后落款yours, LIYue 应放在右下角