IshallbemoreobligedifI'mofferedtheopportunity.Iwillgreatlyappreciaterespondsatyourearliestconvenience.请问大神,此段语法上有错误吗?翻译起来通顺吗?求大神顺便翻译下

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I shall be more obliged if I'm offered the opportunity. I will greatly appreciate responds at your earliest convenience.请问大神, 此段 语法上有错误吗?翻译起来通顺吗?求大神顺便翻译下

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I shall be more obliged If I (have) offered the opportunity.
I shall greatly appreciate for your earliest convenient responds.