一段英文,求修改挑错.Iwouldliketosay,wehavetobesteady.Perhapsinthisenormousworld,youarejustalittlescrew.Andonlyifyoukeepastiffupperlip,holdingyourdreaminthehand,you’llbeabletogettoyourRuritania.Justlike

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一段英文,求修改挑错.
I would like to say,we have to be steady.Perhaps in this enormous world,you are just a little screw.And only if you keep a stiff upper lip,holding your dream in the hand,you’ll be able to get to your Ruritania.Just like Leifeng,who was only an ordinary person,but also a great one,served many people day in and day out.Through his persistence,he realized his own value of life.Only if you be insistent,your life will be meaningful; and only if you be persistent,you will get closer to your dream step by step.
This is just like what we face today.Now we are counting down to have our final exam,a towering peak of our three years’ school life.If you could overlook your future at this moment,you would definitely become tough and be able to fight tooth and nail.In this way,you will have a brighter youth,and create a more meaningful life.
一些不地道或是语法有错的地方请及时指教!

Answer 1

1.I would like to say,we have to be steady.逗号改成that,因为一个句子中只能有一个动词,两个以上就要有连词,此句没有连词,加上that,构成宾语从句.
2.Just like Leifeng,who was only an ordinary person,only改成just,你的意思是只是一个普通人,所以用just 表示“只是”而非only.
3.Just like Leifeng,who was only an ordinary person,but also a great one,这句话有歧义,你是想表达就像雷锋,不但是一个普通人,而且是一个伟大的人吗?可是在中文的表达上是不通的.
4.Only if you be insistent,be改成are,因为,insistent是形容词.
5.you would definitely become tough and be able to fight tooth and nail.In this way,应该是would have become,be改成been,因为是虚拟语气.