有没有英语达人可以帮个忙,修改一下语法错误了MemorandumTo:AccountingstaffCc:ACME’sPresidentFrom:ACME’sAccountingmanagerDate:April12010Subject:FridayofficehourschangeManagementteamdecidedtochangeofficehoursforsu

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有没有英语达人可以帮个忙,修改一下语法错误了
Memorandum
To:Accounting staff
Cc:ACME’s President
From:ACME’s Accounting manager
Date:April 1 2010
Subject:Friday office hours change
Management team decided to change office hours for summer in order to improve employee morale which has been poor on April 1st.All the staffs can leave office for two hours earlier except customer – service department on each Friday.Here are the details:
Old office hours schedule:Monday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Tuesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Wednesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Thursday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Friday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
New office hours schedule:Monday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Tuesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Wednesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Thursday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Friday 8:30 AM 3:00PM
Our department needs an employee for providing basic service on each Friday.One of you four will be stay until 5:00pm.Please me an e-mail or talk to me which Friday you prefer to leave early this week.I will post the time schedule about Friday schedule to you after that.

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Memorandum
To:Accounting staff
Cc:ACME’s President
From:ACME’s Accounting manager
Date:April 1 2010
Subject:change office's hours on friday
Management team decided to change office hours for summer so that we can improve morale of employee which one has been fallen behind on April 1st.All the staffs can leave office for two hours earlier except customer – service department on each Friday.as follow thoes details:
Old schedule:
Monday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Tuesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Wednesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Thursday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Friday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
New schedule:
Monday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Tuesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Wednesday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Thursday 8:30 AM 5:00PM
Friday 8:30 AM 3:00PM
Our department need an employee who can provide basic service every Friday.One of you need to stay until 5:00pm.Please send me an e-mail or talk with me ,and tell me which Friday you prefer to leave early this week.I will send the schedule to you after that.
呼,终于弄完了,我也不知道你看得出来我该的地方吗.我有些我觉得重复了就把它删掉了,有些换了种说法.当然,我也不保证我的会比你的好,只是给你个参考,