英语演讲,请指导请问用这一篇做演讲稿可以吗?怎么表达感情?在哪儿做动作?geatloveaterribleearthquakehappenedinwenchuanonmay12.2008manypeoplelosttheirlivesandhomes.Duringthosedays,alotofstoriesabout

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英语演讲,请指导
请问用这一篇做演讲稿可以吗?怎么表达感情?在哪儿做动作?
geat love
a terrible earthquake happened in wenchuan on may 12.2008 many people lost their lives and homes .During those days ,a lot of stories about love could be heard Here is one of them After the earthquake under a fallen building some soldiers found that a mother died in a very strange way When they were ready to take her away,they were surprised to find that a baby in her arms way still alive The baby was sleepling and wasn't hurnt at all Between the dead mother and the living baby,there was a cell phone with a short message on the screen ,''Don't worry,my baby Mom is with you If you can survive ,don't forget that i love you ''Everybody cried when they read these words
Besides this story,many other stories also moved us deeply.From these stories,we know more about love
You're lucky if you're loved by others You're great if you love others when you're in danger .
在那些日子里,流传着许多爱的故事.这里便有一则：
地震过后,一些士兵在倒塌的房屋地下发现一个以一个非常奇怪姿势死的妈妈.当他们准备把她带走的时候,惊奇的发现在她怀里仍有一个生还的孩子.这个孩子熟睡着,一点儿也没受伤.在死去的妈妈和活着的孩子中间有着一个手机,手机屏幕上显示着一则短信：别担心,我的宝宝,若你还活着,妈妈会永远陪着你的,不要忘了我是多么的爱你.读到这在场的每个人都泪流满面……
除了这个故事,还有许多故事也同样深深地打动我们,我们可以从这些故事更深入的了解爱.
若你被其他人爱着,你会是非常幸运的.当然,若你在危险时也是这么爱着对方那是何其伟大.
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我觉得感情不够 后面有点空 改了一些 不要觉得肉麻
A terrible earthquake happened in wenchuan on may 12.2008.we are in sorrow every time we recall that many people lost their lives and homes in that disaster,and we are still deeply moved when we hear those most beautiful stories about love that happened during the period.Here is one of them.After the earthquake,under one collapsed building some soldiers found a mother dead in a very strange position.When they were about to take her out of the ruin,they were shocked to find that right in her arms,a baby was still alive!The baby was sleeping,sound and quietly,not hurt at all.Between the mother and the baby,there was a cell phone with a short message on the screen,''Don't worry,my baby,Mom is with you.If you survive ,remember that i love you so much ''Everybody burst into tears when they read these words.
there are many other stories like this that touched our hearts.they proved to us that love is the most beautiful and unconditional thing we've ever had.they reminded us that love is around,everywhere and anytime,it is there,in the most tender part of our heart.We are made to believe that we were born to love and we were destined to be loved.