这句话的语法对吗?如果不对,请指出并改正,最好说明理由.WhentheLancasterbombercrasheditwasnottoobadlydamaged,buttheislandwhereitcrashedwassoremotethatthewreckremainedundisturbedformorethantwentyyears.

Question

这句话的语法对吗?如果不对,请指出并改正,最好说明理由.
When the Lancaster bomber crashed it was not too badly damaged,but the island where it crashed was so remote that the wreck remained undisturbed for more than twenty years.

Answer 1

建议一：
把长句改成两句短句.即When the Lancaster bomber crashed it was not too badly damaged.
But,the island where it crashed was so remote that the wreck remained undisturbed for more than twenty years.
本人英语有限,不知道该怎么改更好,但两句分句总觉得有点怪.
建议二：最好把that the wreck remained undisturbed for more than twenty years.改称完时态,即the wreck has remained undisturbed for more than twenty years
原因有二：
1.前后句有因果关系的应用完成事态.
2.for+一时间段的应用完成时态