还有1周就4级考试了.请高手帮我修改一篇4级作文,并评价指正,Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitiledSpringFestivalGalaonCCTV.Youshouldwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbe

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还有1周就4级考试了.请高手帮我修改一篇4级作文,并评价指正,
For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitiled Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
1许多人喜欢在除夕观看春节联欢晚会
2有些人却提出取消春节联欢晚会
3在我看来.
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV
Every year when the Spring Festival sets in,many people prefer to watch the spring festival gala on cctv.Faced with different kinds of programmes,they can not only have a relaxing and amusing time,but also enjoy the harmoniousness with their family members.From this perspective,watching the spring festival gala on cctv can bring a lot of good to us.
In contrast,some people reckon that we should cancel the programme.These are some of the reasons,simple but thought-provoking.In the first place,they think that the spring festival eve is a chance for people to communicate with their family members.After one year's work,study,or some other things,it is necessary to have a chat with them.Only if we get together can we enjoy our time.Subsequently,some people assume that the programmes in the spring festival gala are some stereotypes.As time goes by,seldom do we see some changes in the programmes.
In dealing with this issue,I believe that we should take one's preference into consideration.After all,the spring festival gala is the most prevalent programme on spring festival eve.Millions of people watch it.Hence,I recommend that we should watch it.Surely,it is another choice that no sooner does it begin,than you start to do other things.
另外感觉这个话题不好写,自己感觉写得很烂,请根据我的文章给些好的建议和表达法

Answer 1

每一篇作文都会给一些要求句,把这些句子翻译出来作为主题句,然后扩展它.
如：“许多人喜欢在除夕观看春节联欢晚会” 开头可以写“As we can see, more and more people prefer to watch the Spring Festival Gala with their family on the night before Spring Festival " 然后扩展就好,可以举例子,字数有限,注意把握,不宜太长.
最后提出自己观点时最好加一句"as far as i am concern……或as a collage student, i think……“
多看看范文,找点常用的好句型.
最后祝你能去的好成绩!