急英文就职信改语法是作文,内容不要管,最好今天晚上能改好Januaryth21DynastyToursPteLtd10RafflesQuay#03-03Tower1Singapore1792Dearmanager:I'maChinesepeople,IwasgraduatefromNationalUniversityofSingapore3ye

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急英文就职信 改语法
是作文,内容不要管,最好今天晚上能改好
January th21
Dynasty Tours Pte Ltd
10 Raffles Quay #03-03 Tower 1
Singapore 1792
Dear manager:
I'm a Chinese people,I was graduate from National University of Singapore 3 years ago.1 mouth ago,I lost my job.Because the company is not very well.So I give my boss my letter of resign and leave the company.And 1 week ago,I saw your company job openings.I have to display much interest in your company and the job.So I write a CV for you .
My name is Henry,I'm a man.I'm 25 years old.My hometown is China and I was living in Singapore 10 years.So I have a preferable English base.I was graduate from National University of Singapore.My subject is Hospitality and Tourism.
You know National University of Singapore is a famous university in Singapore and world.So I have a preferable basic knowledge.I have 3 years working experience.In despite this company not very big.But in this company I was act I assume that the management work.And a majority of staff consider my work is good.So I have preferable working experience.In Singapore 10 years.My parents,friends,teacher and boss consider me is a honest,make progress,business like and optimism man.I think this advantage is helps a lot of work.But I still have some disadvasntage,like sometimes lazy and do not care.But I think this disadvantages can correction.I will do my best to correction them.So I want get a chance.
I find out Dynasty Tours Pte Ltd is a good and big company.It have 20 years history.The headquarter in Singapore.Now the company have 4 branch companies and have above 2000 staff.It's a with the strength of the company.
I want come into the company long time.And I know,many talents want come into the company.Maybe I'm not the best one.But if I can induction,I will do my best to work.
I do not ask for much on salaries.I hope get 22000 dollars one year.If I can get some company benefits,It's the best.
My thlephone number 98276482.Look forward to your calls.
Thanks for reading.
Henry

Answer 1

大前提,我猜你是翻译的吧!文章怪怪的,而且现在是formal letter,不可以缩写
1.I was graduate from National University of Singapore 3 years ago.
→graduate is verb/noun
if verb,here is passive voice(be+v.+ed)
noun is 毕业生
so,here cross out was
2.1 mouth ago
→a month ago(need 冠词)
3.Because the company is not very well.
→不够清晰
maybe you can say"That company is not suitable for me."
4.So I give my boss my letter of resign and leave the company
→"my letter" a letter
5.I have to display much interest in your company and the job.So I write a CV for you .
→可更简洁
I was interested in it,so I write this letter for you.
6.I'm a man
→有点多余
7.My hometown is China and I was living in Singapore 10 years.
→你是现在也住在新加坡
Although I am a Chinese,I have lived in Singapore for 10 years.
8.So I have a preferable English base.
→太口语化
So my English skill is capable enough.
9.My subject is Hospitality and Tourism.
→Change is into are
10.You know National University of Singapore is a famous university in Singapore and world.So I have a preferable basic knowledge.
→不用,现在你是求职,不是寸人
11.I have 3 years working experience.
→My working experience is abundant.I have worked for a company for 3 years.
12.In despite this company not very big.But in this company I was act I assume that the management work.
→"In despite"is followed by noun
Although this company is not very famous,I learn a lot of skills.For instance,problem skills,how to lead people and so on.
13.And a majority of staff consider my work is good.So I have preferable working experience.In Singapore 10 years.My parents,friends,teacher and boss consider me is a honest,make progress,business like and optimism man.
→Most of my colleagues think that I have good ability,all of them said that I was a honest ,clever and optimistic man.
14.I think this advantage is helps a lot of work.But I still have some disadvasntage,like sometimes lazy and do not care.But I think this disadvantages can correction.I will do my best to correction them.
I find out Dynasty Tours Pte Ltd is a good and big company.It have 20 years history.The headquarter in Singapore.Now the company have 4 branch companies and have above 2000 staff.It's a with the strength of the company.
I want come into the company long time.And I know,many talents want come into the company.Maybe I'm not the best one.But if I can induction,I will do my best to work.
→不用,太口语化,而且经理对公司的知识多过你,只为了足够字数
你可说说为何选择这份工作
15.I do not ask for much on salaries.I hope get 22000 dollars one year.If I can get some company benefits,It's the best.
My thlephone number 98276482.Look forward to your calls.
Thanks for reading.
→像讲条件般
I am content for the salary and walfare.I hope you can give me an opportunity to contribute to your company.You can contact me at 98276482.I am looking forward for your calling.
16.下款
→不知那人的名字
Your sincerely
你的签名
Henry