帮我修改一篇高中英语日志I come across with the god and I ask:It has been two years!Which time i can get my freedom and run away from your evil hands!The god:You are just my games,you can"t get your freedom,forever!So you can kill me and o

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帮我修改一篇高中英语日志
I come across with the god and I ask:
It has been two years!Which time i can get my freedom and run away
from your evil hands!
The god:You are just my games,you can't get your freedom,forever!
So you can kill me and over the game,or you will be punished.
No,I'm the god,no one can punish me,except me!
He is the god,I'm just the ordinary people,just the game for him!
It has been two years!Which day I can live like a healthy people and
do myself!
希望帮我改正一下上面的语法错误，顺便把一些句子弄得漂亮，

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I come across with the（去掉the） god and I(重复主语,I可以不要) ask:It has been two years!Which time（which time 改成when） i can (I can 改成 can I )get my freedom(get my freedom有点像中式英语,改成be ...