1）修改以下作文的错误；2）按英语六级的标准可得多少分；3）哪些地方可换成更好的表达；4更好的写作思路MyViewOnSmartPhoneNowadays,weliveintheinformationageandsmartphoneisoneoftheexcellentcre

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1）修改以下作文的错误；2）按英语六级的标准可得多少分；3）哪些地方可换成更好的表达；4更好的写作思路
My View On Smart Phone
Nowadays,we live in the information age and smart phone is one of the excellent creatures of this age.
Smart phone looks like a mobile phone,but in fact,it is a combination with mobile phone,camera and computer.We can talk with others who are far away from us and exchange short messages with them.It has a large storage-capacity and abundant functions,which is similar to laptop.We can surf the Internet,read books,listen to music and so on by it.Also,we can take photos and beatify them by smart phone.
However,smart phone still need to be improved.For instance,the speed of surfing Internet is supported to be improved and it will have a better shock resistance.In the future,I think smart phone will be smaller.Maybe smart phone will look like a watch which is more convenient for us to carry.Although smart phone is widely used in developed regions such as America,Europe,shanghai,Guangdong and so on,it's a heavy burden for many families.So the price of it will decrease consecutively.Furthermore,it will be our steward and think tank.It can talk with us and provide apt advice for us when we need.
There is a long pave for the smart phone to go before a new invention is invented to take place of it.

Answer 1

We can talk (to) others who are far away from us and text each other.We can surf the Internet,read electric books,listen to music and so on.we can take photos and beatify them with smart phone.the speed of surfing Internet is supposed to be improved.Although smart phone is widely used in developed regions such as America,Europe,China and so on.it's still a heavy burden for many families.So the price of it should be lowered consecutively.It can talk with us and provide apt advice for us when needed.