大家来看看那个翻译的好原话25岁了，人生的3分之1过去不在了。还没有找到自己所有的人生目标，为自己的3分之1感到无颜，为自己的3分之1感到伤感。当日落的时候，夕阳染红了天空，霓

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大家来看看那个翻译的好
原话
25岁了，人生的3分之1过去不在了。还没有找到自己所有的人生目标，为自己的3分之1感到无颜，为自己的3分之1感到伤感。当日落的时候，夕阳染红了天空，霓虹灯下的我那什么证明我的存在！我将用剩下的3分之2找到自己所有的人生目标包括她！！
第1个：
25 years old, the life of a third in the past no longer.Haven't found all his life goal, for his own one-third feel no yan, for his own one-third feel sad.On that day falls, the sunset dyed the sky, neon under what I proved my existence!I will use the remaining two-thirds find all your own life goals include her!!
第2个：
His year of twenty-five gone,his life of one-third gone.Yet all the targets for the whole life haven't been found,he felt shameful for this one-third,along with sadness.The sunset has fell,all my sky is colored bloody-red,how can he prove his existance instead of weeping under the light?Hence he made up his mind to reach his goals,including the very lady---with his life of teo-third left.
如果有更好的大家可以发表意见 谢谢

Answer 1

这2个的话第二个好一些。