英语作文,请个为高手帮我看看当中有什么语法问题,内容是关于一篇申请换寝室的.I'mamechanicalcollegestudent,livingaroominschoolwhichissharewithanotherstudent.Iwanttoapplyforanewroomnextsemester,beca

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英语作文,请个为高手帮我看看当中有什么语法问题,内容是关于一篇申请换寝室的.
I'm a mechanical college student,living a room in school which is share with another student.I want to apply for a new room next semester,because I haven't enought quiet time to study,owing to many his friends visiting him in room,constantly,and alway holding nosie parties,let alone do some curriculum design and paper.Although I have tried communicating with him in many times,found everthing was in vain.I'm sure you will understand that only solution for me is to move into another room of my own.I'll be grateful if you approve my application ,preferably in which it is a single room and is not in the same building as near to the campus as possibile

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我是一个学习力学的大学生,我和另一个大学生在学校同住一个寝室.下学期我想申请一个新的房间,因为由于他有许多的朋友来拜访他,然后总是不断地开一些吵闹的聚会,导致我在原来的地方没有足够的时间去学习,更不用说进行一些课程设计了.尽管我已经尽力地和他交流过很多次了,但是我发现这一切都是白费的.我觉得你能够明白,搬到另一个地方是解决这个问题唯一的办法了.如果你能同意我的申请,我会非常感激的.如果条件允许的话,我想要的房间尽可能是单人的,而不是在靠近这个房间的同一幢楼.
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第一行不是is share,be动词后面要不是doing,要不就是过去分词,应该是sharing.living a room 要改成 I am living in a room.enought是打错了吧,是enough.alway也打错了吧,是always