这是我作的一些英文句子,怎么可以改善他?Situation(describingdata):StatisticaldatashownbyChapterOne(anindependentonlinebookshop),pointedoutthatpeoplebuyingfiction&non-fictionbookshaddecreasedsharplyfrom55%in201

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这是我作的一些英文句子,怎么可以改善他?
Situation (describing data):
Statistical data shown by Chapter One(an independent online bookshop),pointed out that people buying fiction & non-fiction books had decreased sharply from 55% in 2010 to 18% in 2012.On the other hand,e-books are used by more and more people,with profits percentage rocketed instantaneously.Profits from e-book business had increased 6 times between 2010 and 2012.
Problem (Problem statement):
As e-book reading may become trendy in future,printed book may be abandoned,even eradicated,and most of typographers will close down in the end.
Solution (Solution statement):
One of the best ways to stop the tragedy is to rise some promotion to emphasize the printed book has more superior rather than e-books.
Evaluation of the Effectiveness of the Solution:
Normally,after recording people the advantage of reading printed book,the profit typographers can make will be increased.
Conclusion:
The extinction of printed books would be a disaster to our culture.People should be mobilized to protect printed books from eradication.

Answer 1

Situation (describing data):
Statistical data shown in Chapter One(an independent online bookshop), pointed out that people buying fiction & non-fiction books had decreased sharply from 55% in 2010 to 18% in 2012. On the other hand, e-books are used by more and more people, with profits rocketed tremendously. Profits from e-book business had increased 6 times between 2010 and 2012.
Problem (Problem statement):
As e-book reading may become trendy in future, printed book may be abandoned or even eradicated. Most of the typographers will close down at the end.
Solution (Solution statement):
One of the best ways to promote the trend of printed book reading is to raise some promotions in order to emphasize the printed book has more positive values than e-books.
Evaluation of the Effectiveness of the Solution:
"Normally, after recording people the advantage of reading printed book, the profit typographers can make will be increased.". I don't understand what you want to tell in this sentence?

Conclusion:
The extinction of printed books would be a pity to our culture. People should be encourage to protect printed books from eradication.
My comments.
You have a strong vocaburary. However, you use these words for the sake of using. Using "bombardstic" words to 'decorate' your article will not score points if you used them wrongly. I noticed many students with CET4,6 or even 8 just use any 'big' words in their essay just to show. And sadly to say, their efforts had conned their teachers. Therefore, I think the quality of English teacher also needs to be improved