求此段英文文字的语法纠错若没有发现语法错误,这注明“没有”Thisismyfirsttimetosharesomeofmyownviewswiththewholeclass.Maybethereissomethingwronginmyfollowingdiscussion,soonlyforyourreference.Inour

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求此段英文文字的语法纠错
若没有发现语法错误,这注明“没有”
This is my first time to share some of my own views with the whole class.Maybe there is something wrong in my following discussion,so only for your reference.
In our chemistry class,we have ever learned a little about the thermite ,which is formed from aluminum and some metallic oxides.But do you know that this simple mixture is a real high energy material,and it can really explode under some conditions?
Fist,the energy and speed are the main factors.Thermite can releas a lot of energy when it works.Accroding to some statistics,these energy is much enough to heat the products to a temperature of 3000 centigrades.Nealy all the metals just like light,gold water under this condition.As for the speed,one kilogram of thermite can finish the chemical reaction in just a few seconds in the open air.So you can image how violent it is.
Another factor of the explosion is the gas.As we see,there's no gas in the products,but if you put the thermite in a small space,the aluminum will become gas and the air hidding in the powder will expand fast and violently at high pressuer and high temperature.And it's enough to cause a violent explosion and a fire.Because of these,many bombs and fireworks are still equipped with it.
So,I think that the words in our chemistry text book that"put the thermite in the wet paper"is very irresponsible,because the water will expand violently in the reaction.And it's very dangerous that many chemistry teachers do this experiment in the classroom not in the lab even though they light only a few grams of this mixture.
At last,I want to tell you that we should learn to doubt in our study,don't always follow the text book.

Answer 1

1Maybe there is something wrong in my following discussion,so only for your reference.
there is something wrong in.there is something wrong with
2 this simple mixture is a real high energy material ,这里high是形容词,修饰它要用副词,所以real改成really.而且这里 material的定语太多,宜后置,可改成 this simple mixture is a material with really high energy.
3 these energy is much enough,这里的energy不可数,前面不能用these,改成 the要好点.much是形容词,不能用来修饰同样是形容词的enough.去掉much要好点.the energy is enough...
4 Nealy all the metals just like light,gold water under this condition 这句没有谓语,而且我租知道你想表达什么意思,所以不好改.
5 at high pressuer and high temperature 改成 under high pressuer and temperature
6 I think that the words in our chemistry text book that"put the thermite in the wet paper"is very irresponsible,在这个宾从中,主语是words,谓语是is,主谓不一致.最好把words 改成sentence.
7 many chemistry teachers do this experiment in the classroom not in the lab,改成 instead of lab
8 I want to tell you that we should learn to doubt in our study,don't always follow the text book.英语中,逗号不能连接两个句子.这时候中间要加一个and.
I want to tell you that we should learn to doubt in our study,and don't always follow the text book.
或则把后面的句子改成伴随状语：I want to tell you that we should learn to doubt in our study,not always following the text book.
文章中有许多拼写错误.