我写的另一篇作文15分的话能得几分?有什么毛病?TeenagersstudyingabroadInChina,agreatdealoffamousuniversitieshavebuiltgoodrelationtotheworldwideuniversitiesandinstitutes.Asaresult,moreandmoregraduatestudentsha

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我写的另一篇作文
15分的话能得几分?有什么毛病?
Teenagers studying abroad
In China,a great deal of famous universities have built good relation to the worldwide universities and institutes.As a result,more and more graduate students have the chances to study abroad.Meanwhile,studying abroad has also gained popularity among middle-school students.In my opinion,studying abroad will help the growth of middle-school student.
There are several reasons that will well illustrate the reasons.
First,studying abroad has significant effects both on teenagers’ independence and on the ability of making decision.Because they will be far away from their parents,they have to deal with everything by themselves,such as washing,cooking,and also the time distribution.
Second,the teenagers who study abroad have more opportunities to go further study in foreign universities,which means they can master the most advanced technology.Consequently,once they graduate,they will contribute a lot to the development of native country.
Finally,those teenagers will play a role in the communication between China and the whole world.The Chinese culture can spread to the countries where they study in,as well,foreign culture will be acknowledged by native people.
From the reasons above,it is concluded that the fact that teenagers study abroad is not only good for the students but also good for the native country.

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几个语法错误,其他的还可以